well I would work on a little tiny few bits first caps second you put the speech then took a new line and put said casey then done a sentence next to it and one part you missed a space but apart from that it was fabulous I absouloutly L O V E it
okaaaaay tash great job can i suggest reading father dearest for inspiration but its a wee shame for liz its a moving good and kinda weird story
This is a VERY good story. You should publish it (You would probably get an award for it!) I LOVE it!!!