Ring Ring I wake up arggg what is that I look around and I didn't see any thing. I look at my brother and he was sleeping. So I walk out I'n the living room and I see I person standing there with a black aura on him. I go back I'n my room and lock the door. I wake my brother up he yells "what do you want". I say there's a dark soldier from the black clan we need to run. My brother gets up and puts armor on and we jump out my window.
Okay just a little tip here: make it in separate paragraphs when people are talking like this " hi, how are you?" she said "I'm good, and you?" joesph said See easier to read good story though
When we hit the ground all u hear is a bang. we run faster. "we need to hide" I say. we run to the nearest abandoned house we open the door and go I'n the I lock the door. we need to make a plan. "we need to call our gold clan leader" my brother says I'n a shaky voice. I send a message to our clan leader. he dosent answer so I start to shake. my brother falls a sleep. I hear a knock on the door I look threw the eye hole and see it's my friend John. I open the door and pull him I'n . "we have a problem John says". Then I pass out.
I wake up to buzzing. "what happend I say". I look around and all I see is the door ripped of and the only one I'n the room is me. I start to freak out and go I'n to rage mode and gold flames filled my hole body. I walk out the house with bright gold eyes. I see a dark soldier and throw a gold flame at him and he incinerated. I keep walking then I get hit and knocked out my a flame stinger.