Changing my Existence

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Katedizzy, Apr 27, 2012.

  1. Click. Click. Click.
    They all heard it very clearly... The people in the room stared at me as though I was some sort of monster. Click. BEEEEEEEP. Not like I really can deny that, though.
    There was a time before this, where I didn't have to remove everything I had away from the planet. Like hell, I would not have agreed to this otherwise. There was a time when I wanted to be in the military. I was going to be a sergeant. Those plans didn't exactly work as I had wanted.

    Christopher Macckay. That was my name. An eighteen year old who was an only child. I remember I would work in the fields. My Mother, being a very clumsy woman, would stay in the house trying to sew a shirt that I eventually ending up wearing as a bandana. When they asked for it I wouldn't allow them to take that piece of cloth from me. Something about that bandana gave me hope. Not that I really had any to begin with.

    I never had a talent at standing up for myself, others came first. When I was working in the field one day, a man I didn't personally recognize walked onto the ranch. The first thing I thought of was Who is he? If only I had thought of warning my mother.

    She was in the house sewing my so-called shirt. When the man kicked the door open I knew he was not to be trusted. By going to the shed to grab my rifle I wouldn't be in time. All I had was my pocket knife. Small at first look, but useful as heck. I would have never known that this very day would be the mark of my new life.
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    Hi all! This is my most new piece. I have a lot planned out for it. I hope you all will comment and tell me what you think of it so far!
     
  2.  Keep going!!! This is interesting!!! I don't like reading! But this is interesting because it was short!, But don't stop now! What happens next? Are you going to stab the man! Or what is the man going inside the house for?, or is he just an old friend of your mothers!, lol, above all good so far, I honestly am just going crazy to hear the rest!
     
  3. You will just have to see. Also, I purposely made it short because I don't like reading long chapters either! I am glad you enjoy it!
     
  4. Oh my Jesus! I'm so interested!  kill the man! KILL!!!
     
  5. Very interesting! And it's excellent so far. Keep up the great work and wall me when you update, please.
     
  6. It has potiential, it seems to be good but it's to early to tell.
     
  7. Thank you everyone for the good feedback so far. I am going to do my best on the many chapters to come! I will write you all, also so you know when I updated. 
     
  8. Please readers: Also bump when you can. I love to know when my stories are still active 
     
  9. BUMP!!!


    I'll read it each and everytime u continue the story. 
    This story is good so far.. So keep going 

    Good job, Kate! 
     
  10. "Return to the fleet." From the window I remember seeing that man being aggressive towards my mother. "No. You will not take me away from my son." When I heard that, I was shocked. My mom speaking up for me and defending herself was something unheard of around here. She was supposedly a very weak-hearted woman. She used to never talk back against a man. It had made me worried. Please don't hurt her. It would ruin me.

    I had known that was my cue but I didn't go. I was watching to make sure they wouldn't harm her. Yet another regret for me. "We will take him, then."

    Two men arose from the bushes side by side of myself, grabbing my arms so I would not be able to move. I was actually in shock. They had hid better on the barn than even I, the best hide-n-seeker in the area since K-1.

    Worried I considered my options: One was agree to them taking me or I could choose number two, which was retaliate against them and save my mother. One obviously wasn't an option for me. I chose to retaliate. Using my legs I kicked them both in the shins.

    They did not let go of me even as I had retaliated. Craziness! That was my initial thought. Back then it was uncommon for anyone to be kidnapped, but I was.

    Next thing I know, I had woken up in an odd metal looking room with handcuffs on my wrists. My immediate thought was This is not right. I assumed there was no way out, so I decided to wait.
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    Hi my dear readers! What is to happen... Will Christopher be able to escape or will there be another twist?
     
  11. Good job kate!
     
  12. Thanks! I hope to continue this more!
     
  13. it's to dramatic for me...
     
  14. Really good. I am loving it so far! Bump!
     
  15. Ᏸཔཀཥ, wow... In a room with handcuffs? (I'm the only one thinking wrong?) Nice so far, but it sucks that I could read on what exactly happened... What happened to the mother! Also where did they take him?
     
  16. Ᏸཔཀཥ