We have known each other for a while we first met at Sunday school. It was just a middle school crush, it was taking ur hat and messing with u. Then u would mess me with me too. I remember that special day idk y I remember it so well as if it was yesterday, u grabbed my leg flipped me over and drew a smile face on my foot, after that I didn't see u for a while. Then the first day of my freshman year, there u were I couldn't take me eyes off of u it was the most amazing feeling ever. U stared just like I did in shock and I no we shared a moment. As days dragged on I realized I'm in love with u my friends tipped u off that I liked u and later on ur best friend found out an told u. Yet I feel as if ur scared just as I am to admit because theres one thing keeping us apart and it's the most important thing, family.
Great story, you should start spelling the words how they should be, and make paragraphs to make your story look longer but awesome story.
*your *you're I recommend spacing. And if you want to catch people's eyes, spelling. Spell properly. In no circumstances are you granted a right to spell 'lik dys', even if your friends think it's 'cool'. Slight grammar mistakes too. It's fine though. Don't fret. You'll get the hang of it later.
I have no right to critisize on spelling (because I'm no good at it) but this is worse than mine. Please spell out the whole word. One mistake I noticed was no, and know. They have different meanings. Try to use them correctly. Just a tip! I love the plot to this story though, please continue to write it!
Grammar and spelling is essential. Also, the feelings of the characters, and really descriptive, colorful words make a story much better.
Family is essential, but my love for you is strong. I need you just like a desert needs rain, I long for you like an addiction. That amazing Thursday where we stayed up all night messaging each other, I told you that you can tell me to stop talking yet you didn't want me to stop. This continued and repeated on Friday long nights of messaging till I could no longer keep my eyes open. Then came that dreadful Saturday where I asked you the question i've spent pondering since the day I first saw you.... "Do you like me?" I was dread to find out that you didn't feel the same an only wanted to be friends. That was the day that I finally broke from all the pain I've been holding in, I cried till I fell asleep. I dreaded Sunday knowing the next day I would have to see the one I love that doesn't feel the same. The hour grew long as I waited for Monday, finally the dy arrived I got dressed and waited for the bus. As I got on I saw you and my heart stopped I gathered my courage an sat right in pent of you putting a fake smile on my face I kept myself together. As the bus approach school I got my things together an headed to the hallway my friends wait for the bell, it happened to be across from your groups waiting spot, I caught your eye many times but failed to smile an stared at the floor. I was gonna lose it I decided to just ignore you, but I wish I hadn't I wished I had smiled into your kind eyes an showed you I'm stronger than you thought I was maybe than just maybe, you wouldve fell for me just like I fell go you