So good! But a little bit more constructive criticism: when you add characters, don't just make them in one part, spread them all out!
So, as I said, be careful what you ask for. Apparently Claudia was mad, and I didn't understand... She broke up with me. Ally, the young girl I drove home the other night, has become a pretty close friend of mine... She came up to me and started talking. "She doesn't deserve you. You did the right thing." I told her what happened, she's only 14 but she's mature... "I thought I did, but she doesn't think so." "She will realize what you did was right." She gives me a hug. God, I needed that. Hugs are one of the best things ever. Claudia came into school, she was with David. What the hell? That guy stabbed me! I guess David moved back. Back to his old tricks I suppose. I felt a surge of anger, and I walked up them. "Hey Dave, nice nose, looked like I kicked it pretty good." "Well, I stabbed you, so we're even." "I don't see you with your knife now, want to fight like a man?" "Anytime, any place." "How about now?" I asked in hope. The imbecile actually threw a punch. I quickly dodged and grabbed his arm, one quick blow and you literally hear the bone in his arm break. "I didn't tell you, I learned how to fight." Him wrenching in pain, I think I've done enough. I knew I was already gonna get in trouble at school. But, it was self-defense so I was fine with the law and I walked out've school. I didn't drive today, so I had to walk home. I quickly realized Ally was following me, she was a truly loyal friend. "You broke his arm." "I know." I said so calmly, even I believed I didn't care. The next week, I come to school because I knew I wasn't suspended anymore. Claudia, sitting alone in the classroom. I decided to sit next to her, and I did something crazy... Find out what happens next... Bump!
I'm starting another project as well, it's something really original. I'll keep you all posted! Here's the update you requested. "Hey Claudia, I love you." She sat there speechless. I sat with a confident smile. "I'm not a afraid to admit it," I continue, "I love you. And, personally, I don't care if you don't love me back or if you think not sleeping with you was wrong. I know I did the right thing." "You-you did not just say that? Tha-that must've taken a lot of guts..." Said my friend sitting behind us... "So, Claudia, be mad at me, just know I love you." Going home today I realized I actually meant what I said. "Ring ring" my phone was ringing. I answer. "Hello?" "Hey, it's Claudia... What you said was very brave." "No, it was honest." "Well, I love you too." I froze... "I was wondering if we could go out on a date?" she continued, "You know, to see what happens." "No." "What?" "No." "What do you mean?" "You are using me now... You're playing with me... I know you and David are still dating." "How did you know?" "I didn't, but now I do." "Oh, sh-" I hung up before she could finish. It was time for some revenge... Sweet revenge. I knew just how to get it too. Bump to find out!
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Bwahah Ima remember dat. Btw I got brave with Shane! Heck ya I told him he smalls like pita and carrots...