VALENTINE'S DAY IS A TOTAL ***** # DAY 1 Today I don't feel like doing anything! A just wanna lay in my bee-eed. Don't- Jacob stopped playing his iPod. Seth, his older brother who is 18, plays his loud slipknot music while walking to their new school in Chicago. " Hey Seth? Stop it! It's wrecking my ear drums! " Jacob said in a calm, but demanding voice. " Humph! Nerd... " he said while punching jacob's arm. Seth Brune was the rocker type, with long black hair and wore goth make up. Wore black clothes. Nothing... Else. While Jacob Brune was the athletic, but smart kind of person. He is in love with Bruno mars songs, short brown hair and brown eyes. " Were in a new town, and new country, stop acting bad ass... Cause your not that cool... " Jacob said, punching him back but even harder. Seth annoyed Jacob by playing his rocker music to full blast. RAH RAH RAH RAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!! " God, I hate walking to school.... " They were finally in Chicago knights, high school. Seth stilled played his slipknot music while in the school. Jocks were throwing footballs over everyone's head, the smart people being bullied by the dumb asses, and of course, the freshmans trying to avoid trouble. " This is nothing like New York... " Jacob hesitated, trying to duck whenever the football goes in the air. " So what? This is.... BETTER! " Seth said head bouncing to his music. " Whatever " Jacob whispers to himself, he then puts on his music and continued on listening to the lazy song. When suddenly a big massive brute crushed him, like a pancake. Everyone stopped and looked. " Watch it doofus! " Jacob shouts. " S..,sorry... Sir.. " the massive SOFTY said. Everyone laughed and started throwing scrunched up pieces of paper to the softy. Jacob realized that the softy was the bully victim. He felt bad for saying what he said, but he just ran. " JACOB! WAIT UP! " Seth said. But he just kept running into a random class. It was history class.. " damnit.. " Jacob whispers, " I hate history.... " " and you are? " the class teacher said. " Um.... The new student of the school for this class? " he said, hoping he would fall for it. " Oh! Hello! Introduce yourself, in front of the class. " the teacher smirks. " um.... Ok... " Jacob began. He walked right in front of the classroom and started talking. " hi, I'm Jacob Brune. Before I got here I lived in New York. I'm 17 years old, I LOVE history ( he really didn't ) I'm into sports.. Anything else I should say, mister? " " Mister Andrews. " " anything else I should say mister Andrews? " " no, you may sit next to Frayyel Reid. Your just in luck Mister Brune, because we are learning the mysteries, and deeper facts about the first world war. Now tell me, Jake.. Who killed archduke Ferdinand? " " Dunno.. " Everyone laughed. Jacob felt he is getting more popular by being stupid. But of course he knew the answer! " Quiet class. The person you think who killed archduke Ferdinand is, Dunno? WRONG! It's Galrivo Princip. I thought of you as smart, Jacob Brune, but you'll end up like him! " the teacher points at the person at the very back who is drooling, he had red eyes and snot coming out of his nose. The teacher then showed me who Frayyel Reid and I took my seat next her, who had the most beautiful eyes ever. A perfect sea blue eyes, and the shiniest blonde hair he ever saw. " Hi? " She said noticing me staring at her. " you looking for something... Jacob? " " H.... how'd you know my name? " Jacob wondered. " Haha! Your funny! You just said it a few seconds ago! " " Hehe... " Jacob grinned, while feeling embarrassed. LATER ON IN THE DAY DING! The bell rang meaning it was lunch-break. Every student crammed out of the doors and immediately started talking. Jacob barely made it out because he got squashed by two behemoths between him. " Finally.. " Jacob whispers. " Finally what? " Frayyel comes out of no where and smiles. " Um... Nothin..... " " Don't be shy! It's fine! Go on! " " No really it's nothing, I swear. " " your cute! Listen I gotta go. I'll see you later? Bye!! " Jacob blushed. No one ever called him cute. Not even his own momma. " Jacob!! " Seth appears behind him. " Where the hell have you been? " " History... " " and who's that girl? Your friend or your girlfr- " " No! Shut up! We barely met! " Jacob walked off again. He stormed into the cafeteria, grabbed a tray and lined up for food. The ' awesome ' chef who made a green burger smacked it onto his tray and coughed on it. " there.. " she grunts. He was horrified, he never saw a beast before. But now, he did. He ran off throwing his burger into the nearest thrash can, then took a seat and day dreamed. " Hey buddy! " an Irish voice called out to Jacon behind him. " Mind if I sit here? " The boy had black hair and blue eyes. And took a seat in front of Jacob. " yes.. I'm Irish! Recognize my accent? " " ..... " Jacob said nothing, just stared at him wondering why he came to him. " Not much of a talker are ya lad? That's fine.. I'm a freshman too if your wonderin' " " Really? " he finally said. " Yeah! Came here from Meath in Ireland! My dad got a job 'ere! What brings ya here? " " Just... The same with your story, but my mom got one. I don't really like to say this but, my dad died. " Jacob said softly so only the Irishman can here. " By the way, what's your name? " " Is mise Patrick! My name's Patrick. Yours? " " Jacob.. " " nice! " Patrick takes a bite in his red apple from his paper bag. " Um.... Anything I can eat there? A potato? Cabbage? " " yeah, heres a bar. " " bar? " " chocolate bar? " " oh... " " yeah whatever, here. " he hands Jacob a foreign chocolate bar that he never heard of before. " Kinder beuno? " " It's delicious! Eat it!!!! " Jacob opens the wrapper, takes one piece of it and a tiny bite, with smooth velvety creme inside, the chocolate tingles in his mouth and eventually he takes a giant bite and it tastes like a party in his mouth. And one mini person in his mouth is drunk. Patrick sees Jacob staring into space. " Love it? " " .... " " Haha! " # DAY 2 " Jacob! Wake up! YOUR LATE FOR YOUR DATE WITH FRAYYEL!! " Seth said in a voice just like his mom. " Wha?!? Frayyel? Date?!? COMING!!! " Jacob jumps out of bed about to get dressed until Seth started laughing. " Seth! " Jacob shouts. " how'd you know I like her??? " " Haha! You kept saying while in your sleep, Frayyel... I love you.... " Seth began. " your a freak jake. You'll never get a chance with her! " " shut up! At least I have crush... Unlike you! " " uh, yeah I do! " " who? " " Selena Gomez. " " SHE DOESN'T COUNT! I told you so! " Jacob was tired of this talk he had with Seth, so he put on his earphones, turned on his iPod and lay down. While Seth put attached his phone on two large speakers and played HIS music. " SETH! " HISTORY CLASS " take your seats students. Today is about to get exciting!! We are going to have a major quiz on thursday next. So it literally means that you will have to learn the American revolution, the French, and we have a special one that is associated with Ireland, the industrial revolution! And as an added bonus, you will write three full pages of EACH of those subjects! Good luck! You will have 4 days, so I'll give you time in class to study a bit. " mister Andrews announced. Everyone in class groaned except Frayyel. She really loved history and now she noticed she's in the next level of studying! But for jacob, he hated history and he's going to have to learn it. " you may now start , the amount of time I'm giving you is five minutes, and we'll start writing. " mister Andrews continued. " mister Andrews? " Jacob Said. " can I go to the bathroom? " " no " " why not? " " because that's the oldest excuse in the book, trying to go to the bathroom, but really you want to skip class.. " " nu-uh " " yes, you do, mister Brune. " " no I don't " " you know what would rhyme Jacob? " " what? " " DETENTION!! " " I'm pretty sure that doesn't rhyme.. " " Frayyel giggled. Jacob took notice of her and grinned. " THAT'S IT! I THINK YOU SHOULD GO SEE OUR SCHOOL TEACHER! " he shouted. " m'kay. " He stood up and asked " Where's the principal's room again? " " the next left, then the last door on the right of the corridor. " Jacob walked out of the classroom and followed the instructions. He then was standing in front of the door and knocked. " come. " a voice said behind it. It sounded more like a woman then a man He opened the door and saw the principal working on some sheets of paper. A gold small banner read, ' Chayse Ulrich ' " hello miss Ulrich... " " ... " no response came, only the noise of a pen scraping on the piece of paper. " I was sent here because I got into an incident with mister Andrews, and- " Suddenly miss Ulrich ripped her paper by drawing a heavy line on it. She threw the paper at Jacob and he caught it. It was a picture of a house, but of course, a house with a huge line rip in the middle. " What's this??? " Jacob demanded. " none of your bees wax, Sherlock Holmes. " " what... The .... Hell..... " " NO LANGUAGE LIKE THAT IN MY SCHOOL MISTER HOLMES!!! " " uh... Okay.. " " Now, where have you placed my sandwich. Hm? Did you eat it? Cause it took me 20 minutes to make that sandwich Sherlock! If you ate it, you make me another! " " i didn't eat your sandwich.... " " OUT! OUT AND MAKE ME ONE! " " wuh? " " OUT! " Jacob rushed out of the door and went to use his money to buy a sandwich instead of making one. He went to the cafeteria and got one. Jacob returned in front of the miss ulrich's door, not wanting to go in. He slowly opened the door and found that Miss Ulrich was chugging down two cans of redbull. While playing songs on her radio. " uuuummm... " Jacob was astonished, he never seen an awesome teacher like this back at New York. " wuh? SHERLOCK!! " Chayse Ulrich began, " Did you make me my sandwich? " " Yes, yes I did. " " hand it over Holmes... " He did what he was told. The school principal examined the sandwich, then gulped it down without swallowing it. " wooooaaah.... " Jacob said. " What??? " " nothin... " " since you have brought me my sandwich, I will not send you to detention today. Now return to your evil doings. " Jacob walked out, and the bell rang. The whole school, again, filled the hallway going to their lockers, beating up some people, went to the cafeteria etc. he chose to go visit the cafeteria, and soon bump into Patrick. He did, and they sat, shared Patrick's food, and especially gave another kinder beuno to Jacob. Out of nowhere, Frayyel stood next to Jacob, and gently tapped his shoulder. " Hi " she said. " hey!! " Jacob was always shy around pretty girls. " Who's this Jacob? " Patrick smirked. " I'm Frayyel! Nice to meet you. " " I'm Patrick. " " PATRICK! Nice to meet you. " " anyway, why'd you come here Frayyel? " " well... You know how you stood up to mister Andrews? Yeah? Well no one ever stood up to him, the last person to stand up to him was severely punished and was suspended from school. So, I was wondering if we can hang around sometime? Like Saturday? And teach me some courage. " she winked at Jacob and left to sit at her table. " what was that mate? " Patrick asked. " just.. Stuff. " Saturday ( # DAY 6 ) After chatting with Frayyel on twitter, she told her where she lived and where they should go to. Jacob walked down the street with his checked shirt, jeans and a little bit of gel in his hair. He knocked on the white wooden door and Frayyel appeared being as beautiful as ever. " hey. " Jacob said, leading her out of the house. " ready to watch a movie? " " of course! " AT THE CINEMA He grabbed the two tickets for, ' love and fear ' the movie. " I can't believe we're watching this! I was dying to see this any day! Thanks again Jacob! " " no problem, snacks? " " something sweet, I'll meet you in the theatre! " she took her ticket from him and went. Jacob queued in line, after a few minutes, he was in front of the line and ordered a small popcorn for him, and a chocolate bar and a bag of sweets for Frayyel. He walked in the door and the movie was already starting. " DAMN YOU CHRISTOPHER!! " the movie said. " Hey " Jacob found Frayyel and sat next to her. He piled Frayyel's snackson her lap. " THIS ISN'T OVER JOHN I WILL KILL YOU! " the movie said. " THIS IS WAR, FIGHT TO THE DEATH FOR MARY ANN! " A blonde hair man stabbed another man in the stomach. Frayyel loved these type sof movies ' killing movies ' Jacob got scared and hid behind Frayyel. " hehe, stop it jake! Your making me laugh! " " SH! " a group of woman said behind Jacob and Frayyel. AT THE END OF THE DAY " I had fun today Jacob. Wanna hang out next week? " " Yeah, we should. " Jacob leaned forward for a kiss and so did Frayyel. CAUTION! ( from this point on, it will be about kissing and stuff, so if your under the age of 95 you may read on... ) ( no sex is written in this story so GTFO PERVS! ) Jacob's lips, ( wait, the first two words sound romantic and stuff right? Well it's about to get more than that! ) softly touched Frayyel's. They held each others hands and each of them were in a dream of their own. Jacob's head tilted right, while Frayyel's tilted left. " mmmmm " mumbled the both of them This kiss lasted for three minutes. After a while they both went inside Frayyel's house, quietly and went upstairs to Frayyel's room. Frayyel lay on the bed while Jacob.. Closed the door... FRIDAY ( # DAY 12 ) Patrick's pov I walked home from school alone because Jacob walked the other way with Frayyel. I was furious. I had to do something. Later on in the day, I'll come over to Frayyel's house and let her leave Jacob alone for just a day because that was my only friend. In the faint air, I could almost hear an iPod playing Bruno Mars. I wonder who could that be. Later on... " FRAYYEL! " I say walking up into her room. She opens the door, but she was dressed in a lingerie. " yes? " " um... May I come... Co....come in? " " yeah " She opens the door and I sit gently on her bed, while she closes the door. She quickly puts on her proper clothes and took a seat next to me. " what do you want? " " J.... Jac.... Jacob.. " JACOB' S POV I pull all the clothes from my wardrobe and search something to wear. We both decided that we should have another date today instead of tomorrow. I pick up a white t shirt, but it didn't look good, so I threw it onto the floor. Then I found a a shirt colored red with ' Ugly since 1902 ' sign on it. I didn't like that one so I also threw that away. " GOD! Its so hard to find something good to wear!!! " I grab a black and red striped shirt, put it on, wore some jeans, put a pair of warm and comfy socks on myself, went downstairs, put on my shoes and stormed out of the house to meet Frayyel. Soon enough I end up open ending the door of her room finding Patrick making out with Frayyel. She looks at me and gasps. " Patrick... " I say. I run out of the house, a tear on my face. " Jacob! Wait! " she cry's But I don't, I try the urge to listen to Bruno Mars but I throw my iPod on the ground and smash it with my foot. I run. Run back home. I kick my door room hard and fall on the bed, face buried inside the pillow. I tried to kill myself in that attempt, but I couldn't. There was so much in life that could be seen and heard. But not in my mind now. I couldn't get the picture of my new best friend kissing the girls I loved. THE WEEKEND ( # DAY 13
Saturday My face is still buried I'm my pillow. My mom tried to get in my room and sort something out. Seth doesn't even care about me. But I don't care about him either. Since the day I was born I didn't respect him. I never had thought about him as my brother.
Sunday I plan never to come to school tomorrow. The things I eat now are the left over from my bin. A half eaten, black banana, I ate. I hope I die soon. Today was suppose to be valentines day. I bet Patrick's with Frayyel right now.
MONDAY # DAY 15 I missed school. That was what I was planning anyway. I flick on the tv and watch the Chicago news. Nothing happened accept Chicago Knights High School is getting burned down by a fire.... Wait.. What?!? I unlock the door, my parents are still asleep and Seth is too ' sick ' to go to school. I run to the school and saw a large flaming beast slowly licking on the school. I hear screaming. No firetrucks are in sight. I walk over to see what was happening. I see Frayyel run to me and hug me. " Patrick... HE'S STUCK IN THE SCHOOL! YOU GOT TO SAVE HIM! " Frayyel said I push her away and ran into the school, quietly singing. today I don't feel like doing anything... The school was full of a red color and flames. I walk slowly and search for my buddy... patrick. " Jacob!! " he called I saw him inside the laboratory, trapped. I just wanna lay in my bee-ed I quickly grab him and haul him into the flaming school entrance. Don't feel like picking up my phone, so leave a message at the tone I gently push him out, he makes it and falls in front of Frayyel. They hug each other and stare at me. I, was just there waiting for it. " COME BACK! " Frayyel shouts. " What are you doing lad?? " Patrick shouts. cause today I swear I'm not doin any- A large plank of wood that was set on fire hits my back hard. The suddenly a large numerous of them land on top of me... " JACOOOOBB!!!!! " the ones, that meant the world to me shouted. The maker's comment: Thanks for reading this special fan fiction I made, I really hoped you enjoyed that! It took me like a week to think about the plot, scenes, characters, etc. But the true morale of the story is... 1. Bruno Mars Rules!! 2. NEVER COMMIT SUICIDE IF YOU ARE IN A BAD MOOD, IT WILL NOT SOLVE ANYTHING, AND IT WILL ONLY MAKE THE PEOPLE WHO STILL CARE ABOUT YOU WORRY AND SAD. See you soon lads! HEIN
I think you shouldve developed it more. It kept my interest throughout and I would have loved to see some more drama and action.