OK so ya here is a attempt at this all and not really sure put it in the right Forum but yea ere ya go... HAZEL TEARS Prologue The screams broke the peaceful slumber as a little girl no older then five stood with awe struck as blood sprung out of her guards and onto the wall in a shape of a leaf. Like every elves blood does when spilt. The little girl watched in horror as men and women in mask produced swords and slaughtered all of her protection before her very eyes. Not once did they ever look her way for she was small and delicate and hard to spot. Her silver hair pulled into pom-pom styled pig tails as her small innocent lavender eyes took in the horror taking place in front of her and forever printing it's self into her mind. Her French vanilla skin gone pale from shock. Her dull elf pointed ears covered as she silently screamed making a run for her parents bedroom. She yanked the door open to find her parents defending off two people in masks. The little girl yelped as the nature around her began to move with a life all it's own and wrapped around the attackers neck and squeezed. Her parents widen there eyes in shock for their little girl has never been told of the powers she possesses with being an elf and being from an ancient bloodline. Because she was only five and still just a little girl. But as quickly as they were shocked it went away as her parents ran to the little girl grabbing her while running out the door. The little girls eyes never leaving the squirming men in her parents room. "Mommy why are they hurting us?" The little girl asked confusion in her voice laced with fear and wonder. "I don't know sweetie. I just don't know." Her mother croaked trying to swallow the lump growing in her already tight throat. "Daddy will we be ok?" The little girl whispered sounding way beyond her age. "I hope so bunny I hope so.." He muttered looking behind them. "I love you mommy, daddy." The little girl said a tear rolling down her check for she could feel it. That, that would be the last time she would ever get to tell her parents she loved them. The little girl sniffed a bit before hugging the two of them. It didn't last long for two people showed up and attacked her parents. The little girl watched as her parents fought for their lives while she couldn't do anything she felt weak. She watched as blood red leaves printed onto the walls and the floors. She herself had blood leaves scattered across her clothes and face. In the end her parents were killed and she was badly bruised after fighting to at least try to save her parents. But they died before she could save them. The little girl in return took two life's for the price of her parents life. Soon after she ran away into the night away from the massacre she called her parents death. The little girl ran leaving her past and her memories of that night behind. She ran clutching the only reminder of her parents she had. A silver locket that says Hazel in fancy cursive and our baby girl below it. With a picture of her parents inside. Hazel cried as she ran into the night never looking back. CHAPTER 1- Hazel The sun blazed down on me as I stood at the edge of the crashing waves. My whole classes eyes on me watching, waiting to see what I would do. My blood red vine tatto that wraps around my shoulder to just below my elbow on my right arm. As the red leaves sprouting from it started to glow a bit as the whole thing began to tingle. I could feel the power coming coursing through my body and to the palm of my hand. The bleeding boy in front of me choking on the little air his lungs could take in. His dark chocolate hair swept aside and sticking to his face. His skin extremely pale form his usual french vanilla complexion. His eyes were closed as he winced in pain. I walked to the water with the boy and lowered him into it. Sitting in it with his head on my lap. I water around us seemed to slow as I took a handful and poured it over his wound before covering it up with my hands. I felt him relax beneath my touch as I ended his suffering relieving the pain but couldn't heal the wound. I started to lower him into the water so his corpse would be one with nature. Just as I was lowering him his eyes opened for just a second as he whispered two words. His eyes were a piercing endless deep blue color bearing so much pain and guilt. The words he whispered were, "Why, Hazel?" Then he died. I had no idea what he was talking about but as soon as he said them I felt like crying. I started shaking him as I suddenly knew his name. "Wake up tell me what you ment!" I whispered tears falling from my light lavender eyes. "Wake up! Wake up! Hazel wake up!" I heard someone screech pushing me out of bed. I landed with a thud before I jolted up and glared at the culprit my dream forgotten. I watched as Serenity, my sister, found my bed very interesting and started to fidget and straighten my bed sheet out. "Haha," she croaked nervously why she started to scratched her arm, a nervous habit. "Good morning Haze." I just glared as her pixie cut styled mossy black hair stuck up in odd angles and her clear blue almost green right eye and the other dark brown almost black left trained onto my shaggy forest green carpet. Her carmel skin going a shade paler as I leaped across the bed and tackled her to the floor. She let out a small yelp as we collided with the floor. I poked her in the stomach and howled with laughter as she growled. I smiled lightly before getting off her. Serenity is my sister yes. After the incident that happened when I was little Serenity's family took me in at only age five and gained custody of me. "Good morning Rin," I said happily as I got up and headed for my door grabbing my school uniform on the way out. Serenity lightly chuckling following me out the door her uniform already on. "Ready to head off to the start of the second week of school? Bet today we will get to actually have a full day because we couldn't last week cause someone not mentioning any names," *cough* "Seria" *cough* "Decide it was easier just to throw random ingredients into the science lab instead reading the directions. In result blew up the whole west wing!!" Serenity huffed throwing her hands up. You see Serenity likes school and doesn't particularly like Seria, not that I blamed her. Seria went all crazy on Serenity's freshman year an fought with her. To this day we have no clue what made her so purely hate her. I mean you ask any girl or boy that was in Serenity's class that year and they'll tell she was a kind hearted girl. Just had a temper when it came to Seria after she attempted to fight her. But I mean come on a pixie against a werewolf, Serenity being the werewolf, what were the odds? "Ya," I mumbled. I on the other not such a fan of school. All it was a closed space for girls to act bitchy poor kids be picked on and players to play with their "toys". I only have one friend there besides Serenity. Her name is Rain with a E making it Raine. She's a vampire. Haha a vampire friends with an elf whose sister is an werewolf. Isn't there some unspoken law of how vampires and werewolf's hate each other? Yet Raine is like mine and Serenity's second sister! Oh wells. I walked to the bathroom and took a quick refreshing cold shower. Loving the way the cold water felt against my tingling skin. Soon I was so numb from the freezing cold water I got out. Feeling clean, refreshed, and new. I quickly dried my silverly black hair, it reflects a silver tint in the right angle of light, and let it wave around my heart shaped face framing it well. I applied light eyeliner around my storming light lavender eyes making them more noticeable. I then put on my school uniform which consisted of, for the girls, either a plaid black silver and midnight blue skirt with a black blouse and either midnight blue or silver vest. Or a simple midnight blue and silver dressed that hugged your body until it gets to your waist where it flows out down to just about right above your knees. The top of the dress look like a blouse and we have to wear a black vest over it, but the vests they provide are the cool ones that are tanked top sleeved and hugs your body and stops just a bit after your bust. Half way between your bust and belly button. Could do with the fact are principal knows what it's like to be a teenager still because she's a vampire and stuck at the age of 17. I chose to go with the dress. The dress made my French vanilla skin seem to pop in contrast to the dark colors and I loved it! I put on my black ballet flats that had frilly little bows at the toes and put in silver broken heart earrings in my dull elf pointed ears. I then applied clear lip gloss to my soft slender pink lips, completing my look. After checking myself over I nodded with approval at my reflection and walked out of the bathroom and grabbed my bag from my room and a silver locket with my name on it. Then met Serenity downstairs at the kitchen table. "Whats smokin'?" I asked Serenity as I sat down grabbing a piece of toast and a bowel of cinnamon and sugar-fied oats and started eating. Serenity shook her head as she smiled and sat across from me staring briefly at our parents empty chairs. They went on a business trip and won't be back till next week. Serenity was wearing the skirt and blouse with a pair of black Mary janes. I smiled and continued to eat. When we were all done we walked outside and got into my car. A black hearse with a coffin in the back with a stereo system in it. I thought it was wicked. Serenity thought it was funny. Others thought it was disturbing. Anyways once we got in the car we drove off to Night Side high, the home of the beloved un-defeatable Dragons. Fifteen minutes later we pulled up into the student infested parking lot and parked in the middle of the lot. As soon as I got out noises filled my ears and I stuck my ear buds in my ear and started listening to Ashes by In This Moment and drowned out all the useless annoying chatter. I started walking and watched out of the corner of my eye as Serenity walked towards a group of overly muscled boys and pretty buff girls, her pack, and I do mean HER pack she is the alpha and whopped the last alphas ass to get there. I was smiling at the thought when I saw a bright vibrant red flash from the corner of my eyes. I blinked and Raine was in front of me with her hand clutching her boyfriend, Dean he's a werewolf, arm affectionately. Raine has bright vibrant red hair that seemed to pulse with a life all it's own. She has slender yet full healthily pink lips. Her eyes are big round full of innocents and a deep onyx color more beautiful then anything that seemed to pop against her ghostly pale complexion. She was also wearing the dress. Dean has short silky baby fine more brown then blonde dirty blonde hair. His eyes are a soft baby pink which just looked right with his adorable baby face. His nose was covered in freckles with a few scattered across his checks. His lips were a soft red and never seemed to stop smiling. He was decently built but he still reminded me of a cute baby. I took my ear buds out and looked at them. "Hey," I started as they just stood there. "Oh, oh yea hey Haze! How are you??" Raine asked smiling like a fool. I laughed at her behavior. "I'm good, whats got you so hyped?" "Nothing, I just am happy today! Plus I hear we are getting a new student today! And you know I love meeting new people!" Raine said quickly looking like a little kid after they walked into Candy City. Me and Dean laughed as I put one bud back in my ear and walked past a small group of kids talking about there life before, before they fell. They were all fallen angels. In the middle of the group was Helena. She has deep forest green eyes with long flowing snow white hair with the bangs a baby blue color. She has a vanilla complexion and slender light pink lips. Her wings are always hidden and black, as is all other fallen angels. Helena is pretty small for her age reminded me of a pixie sometimes. I have nothing against her and honestly she is really kind. In my book she is friend material I just never had the chance to talk to her or get to know her. I smiled her way getting a small short smile back as I continued to walk towards the school building. Once we got inside we waited by the doors, by Raine's command of course, to wait for the new kid to arrive. While we waited I watch the scenery around me I watched as kids gossiped in the halls laughing and ran around looking for their friends. I watched as the royal pain in all of me, Raine, and Serenity's ass walked towards the door from the office. Seria. She has big round glistening midnight dark violet eyes. Two slender full light pink lips that seem like they’re painted onto her cream white, literally white, skin. She has a light red wilting flower shaped birth mark on her right shoulder that we could she thanks to the way she ways wearing her dress. She has wavy wave like chlorine water blue hair. Her wings were out and they were your average girly girl pixie wings. They were shaped like a butterflies and were light pink with a dark pink out lining them and the baby blue spots on them. Everything, but her wings, I will admit was pretty. She was actually really pretty. I watched as luckily she ignored me, and Raine and walked right out door as a boy I've never seen before came in. He had short cropped dark chocolate hair with piercing deep endless blue eyes. He had a French vanilla complexion with lips the color of a ripened peach. He was nicely built and tough looking. All in all he didn't look half bad but he seemed to remind me of someone.... The boy started to look in every which direction looking for someone I guess. Until his eyes landed on me. His eyes seemed to relax then harden as he walked my way. Raine started to bounce excited to meet someone new. Soon he was standing right in front of me and gently took my hand and planted a light kiss on the top of my hand. "Hello my name is Hunter." Then I knew why he was so familiar he was the guy from my dream.
CHAPTER 2- Hunter I woke up in my new house in the middle of the night dazed. I looked at the alarm clock by my bedside, it read 3:47 a.m. I suppressed a sigh as I sat up and stretched. Pushing my dark chocolate locks to the side when they hung in my eyes. Getting up I headed to the kitchen running into boxes left an right. I just moved in from the agency and was starting school today. I was not ready for it at all. This is my first mission, and my target is Hazel Wood. Sighing I grabbed a glass and put it under the faucet. Today was going to be a long one that's for sure, I sighed heading back to my room with my glass. Walking into my room I sat on my bed and grabbed a picture from my bedside table. The picture was of a girl she had silvery black mid back length hair. Her eyes were a light lavender and made her look angel like with her french vanilla skin tone. On her right was a white wolf and on her left was a girl with flaming red hair they were all grinning, the wolf more looked like she was howling, at the camera. The middle girl was my target, my mission simple befriend her and gain her trust. Thus why I am here. It's going be my first mission away from the agency, alone. I just really hope I don't blow it. Putting the picture down and finishing my water I laid down and closed my eyes letting sleep take over. ~~~~~~~~~~ I awoke once again this time my clock read 6:53am. I quickly got up and threw on the uniform. Black slacks with a short sleeved silver dress shirt and a midnight blue sweater vest. I ran downstairs and grabbed some bread and stuck it into the toaster. Then grabbed some orange juice form the fridge and poured it into a glass as I reviewed over the map of the school. By now I knew the whole lay out of the school building and campus. Now if I ever need a quick way to escape or hide I knew where to go, I guess if it came to that, and all the best hiding spots where I can have a phone call privately with the agency on my progress. I was startled out of my thoughts as my toast popped up from the toaster. Grabbing them I spread some grape jelly on them and munched on them thinking. I was thinking of how this all would play out. How this girl would be like? If this would be a easy task. I kept thinking of these things as I finished up my food and grabbed my school bag. I headed out the door and got into my car. I arrived just in time to see Hazel walk into the front door followed by the girl with the blazing red hair and a boy with dirty blonde hair. I quickly went to catch up with them. On the way in I saw a glimpse of Helena and my blood went cold as I kept my head down hoping she didn't see me. It would be bad if she did, really bad. She could jeopardize this whole mission. Keeping my head down I hurried to the front doors, and walked in. Once inside I looked up and all around looking for her, Hazel. I kept looking until my eyes fall on her. She was standing next to the girl with blazing red hair and the boy. I relaxed my eyes relived I finally found her before hardening them thinking of them and made my way to her. Her friend was bouncing up and down as I approached. I just kind of ignored her as I walked up and took Hazels hand. Looking up at her I smiled and placed I light kiss on the top of her hand as I said, "Hello my name is Hunter." I watched as her eyes grew wide.
Um, there's a bit of an overflow of information...I mean it's nice, but I guess there's so much description, it makes the story duller. Space it out...the character seems a little superficial. We don't need to know she has lavender eyes several times. Okay? Sorry if I made you made, I'm just trying to help... Iwasbored™
@happines saddness Gees i think Its find just the way it is , and you shudent just say somthing mean say your opinión then say somthing positive about it , not that theres anything wrong whit the story
It's ok I wrote it a little while back and have improved on that I just thought that I'd stuck it out there I just I've read it after I posted going to try and edit but thank U both bad criticism is always wanted helps writers improve as does good criticism
Well, no story is perfect. It's a good storyline and the character. Maybe you should learn English better if it's not your best language If you just choose to be illiterate, then that's fine too.