This is my fist story so it won't be very good and my friends play parts as well so here it goes! It was a snowy december evening, it was the last day of school and he wanted to get home fast, so he took his short cut through the woods, that was when it all happened he ran to the scream to see a girl his age be mugged and hit, the muggers heard rhyan running towards them and they ran, little did he know that she was shielding a 12 year old girl, as he ran over to them the older girl said to him "thanks I'm lily this my younger sister sammie" and then she collapsed sammie shouted as she fell but rhyan caught her and he said " come to my house you can rest before going home " so they staggered through the forest. To Be Continued
So they staggered through the forest weary of the sound they were making as they came to the edge of the forest they heard more movement and then a boy stopped in front of them as they ducked the boy looked around about the same age as sammie, it took a while but eventually sammie realised who it was she ran up to him and gave him a hug it was her bf Josh he said "what happened to you lot?" rhyan answered "they got mugged I am trying to get them home" and then Josh said "let me help" so he helped support lily, but then a car was heading straight for them rhyan noticed the 4 people and shouted -"RUN" rhyan grabbed lily and ran towards the house with josh and sam in pursuit the car headed straight at them, rhyan reached the door it was locked so he grabbed a broom and broke a window he jumped in pulling lily behind him sammie climbed through followed by Josh just in time as the car smashed through the wall! To Be Continued
Re: The mugging The car carried on driving it took out pillars, tables everything we they were all hiding upstairs whoever it was they wanted us dead, they took out the stairs next that's it they were stuck rhyan was thinking he climbed up a ladder to the attic pulled out a hunting rifle (it wasn't loaded but only rhyan new that) he aimed at the car it reversed out and went down the road rhyan laughed lily, sammie and Josh jumped on the floor "it's not loaded but we better get out of here and whoever wants us wants us dead!" To Be Continued
Guys, are you really that heartless? -.- OP, your story plot is nice, but please put the proper puncuation where it belongs, and your grammar... Erm... Is... A bit out of the pink.
"we need to get out of here" said lily panicking, "we need a car and fast" shouted sammie. "follow me" said rhyan. So they followed rhyan he jumped down and ran outside grabbing the keys as he went they jumped down and ran out the house thinking the coast was clear josh and sammie followed him but as lily came out she was grabbed and shoved in a car she screamed, sammie fell to the floor crying rhyan and Josh sprinted down the road after the car and then 2 people pointed guns towards them and they fired one just missed rhyan but one hit Josh in the arm rhyan carried running but eventually he turned back and said were "going after them!" To Be Continued
It was a hour after lily had been kidnapped, Josh had his arm cleaned up and they were waiting for a car to stop next to them, after a little while they ran to lilys house were sammie said her other sister would be, they got there to find her sister getting in her car when sammie shouted "ANGIE STOP SOMEONE'S TAKEN LILY"angie turned to look at sammie and kriss got out the car he said "get in will have to chase them what way did they go?" "they were heading north" rhyan said so they drove off heading north all they new was the cars number plate... To Be Continued
Kriss drove them to the police station were they told the police and gave them the number plate, Josh was told to stay at the hospital while 3 police cars and rhyan, sammie, angie and kriss followed the car on a bit of police equipment which told them were the car and lily were heading all they had to do was type in the number plate and they were off on the track of the muggers... To Be Continued